Friday 26 August 2016

olympic Moment in time




WALT: describe a moment in time.

Take your marks get set go! off I went my heart was pumping. I was moving like lightning. I knew I was going to win the 100 - metre race. I jumped across the line. I heard the crowd cheering  jamaica, jamaica. When I was on the top off the podium with the gold medal around my neck I felt proud.


































































































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3 comments:

  1. Max29 August 2016 at 11:19

    Hi Copper, I like how you put on your marks, get set, go.

    You did a great job.

    Next time remember to put capital letters on countries.

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  2. Holly29 August 2016 at 11:30

    Hi Cooper I like the way you put the simile I was running like lightning.

    Your next step is to use capital letters for Jamaica.

    Thanks,
    Holly

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  3. Anonymous5 April 2017 at 09:51

    Hi Cooper Sammi Here
    I like your descriptive language but make sure you use capital letters for nouns like contries!

    Check out my blog http://paroagreysammif.blogspot.co.nz/

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